Drowning
You people say it goes away,
just give it time.
Well DAMNIT!
I've given it MONTHS NOW,
and the pain hasn't even faded!
You all tell me not to think about it.
To just forget.
BITCH!
I want you to go through this!
Feel what I'm feeling then try to just "forget".
I'm tired of listening to you people.
You DON'T understand.
You have NO clue what I'm going through,
and your "help" is just fucking me up more.
So dont give me a word of advice,
if you havent been through it before.
And dont put your two cents in,
if you dont know what you're talking about.
Just leave me alone,
unless you carry real help with you.
But untill then,
just let me be.
And if you see me struggling in the water,
let me drown,
Don't try to help,
cause you'll just end up holdin me down.
idk this one seems kinda... empty to me. tell me wacha think.. and thank you to those of you that are still keepin an eye on me :)))
Comments
This is what I call a 'processing poem' Brandi. Its a perfect vehicle for a good vent - like a journal entry, but is it your best poetic effort?
I'd like to see you losing some of the "you's" ie/
You people say ,
You all tell me,
You DON'T understand.
see? Tell me more about Brandi - what's happening inside your head, your heart - find me some metaphor, build me a poem ... I know you can ;)
Still watching :)
no.. like i said it seems kind of empty to me..
It's not my best.. but it's my best at the moment.. im kind of stuck.
I'm trying to write more so that I can get unstuck, and I'm getting there, but I'm still stuck.
Thank you for still keeping an eye on me after me not writing so much for a while. :))
A proper vent.
Good for you.
Take care.
LB